Not every body knows how it feels like
Pain cant be told aloud,
It hides in one's self just alike,
Rain held in a black cloud.
One who's expected to make you smile,
becomes the reason for your grief!
As you feel the break of something fragile,
you find you are dying and theres no relief.
The time of regret finally arrives,
You wish the meet happened never.
For it is pure sorrow this meeting derives,
Brush your teeth properly,Dont go to a dentist ever!
rofl !!
ReplyDeleteawesome twist :D .... just the kind of poem i like :)
When I opened your blog... thought wudnt comment just read it.. But the poem forced me to comment..
ReplyDeleteReally nice!!! :)
I don't understand how that came from during the mid-sems.... :P
ReplyDeleteIts a good poem. :)
huuuu , fantastic and no more words [:)] !!. nice one !!!!!
ReplyDeleteWow, this is a nice read, it's playful and wonderfully written. Thank you for sharing it :)
ReplyDeletelolllzzz...
ReplyDeletebeautiful... :)
I know that pain :))
ReplyDeleteWhen I started reading it, I thought my comment on it would be long, but after the twist in the end, this is what I am left with.
ReplyDeleteNice one!
Just can't help my urge to appreciate this one, even though I'm no fan of poetry! Well written.
ReplyDeletehe he he ...grr88 as always ... :)
ReplyDeletegud one.
ReplyDeleteIt reminded me of an old poem, that I read back in school, and it read like.."the pain which is both physical and metal is dental .....".
I don't rem the author name.
*mental :D
ReplyDeleterofl @ Devansh.
ReplyDeleteVaise even I was gonna advise you to let go of some of the rhyme, but I guess in this and Namrata's latest kind of poems, rhyme is required.
Good one. Send some of yours to the mag na?
@yogesh, that poem about "visit to the dentist" is by Ogden Nash
ReplyDeletetrue! dentists are hard to forget creatures, I remember that dentist who burshed my tooth with a metal brush!!
ReplyDeletehehe :D wah! kya twist tha :P
ReplyDeletetwist 2much vundi.
ReplyDeletesmall but awesome one...
@Gopal: Lol @ "burshed my tooth with a metal brush!!"
ReplyDeleteSuper sweet!! The ending was great.
ReplyDelete:))
ReplyDeleterofl da =)) awesome one...
ReplyDeleteI agree with Himank... it's a wonderful piece of work, fantastic. I wish I could rhyme my feelings, ideas and emotions like this... :)
ReplyDelete@Yogesh: The poet's name is Ogden Nash :)
read the 1st stanza , thought abt it in usual context , went 4 da comments and one of them mentioned abt da twist :D , so i read it fully , nice one :)
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